"Poolside" festival review

I didn't get into a short film festival.

Ah..part of being a filmmaker is enduring a lot of criticism. Or just not seeing who the people watch this movie are. This coming from three different reviewers. So collectively, my short film didn't impress them in "that way." The demographic of the three reviewers (which is cool that they post this). (1) 47 year old homemaker (2) 37 year old researcher (3) 40 year old systems engineer/screenwriter
Not necessarily doing this for a living. However, THEIR reviews are valid. If not more so, since this is the demographic of the paying audience I have to impress:

Briefly describe the story (include protagonist → conflict → resolution.)
A obsessed man ponders his unrequited love and takes a morbid? imagined? step to be with her forever. I am unclear what the resolution is...did he really kill her?

What is the main reason you did or did not recommend this submission?
The blurring between imagination/memory and reality makes the resolution a complete mystery, in a way that leaves the viewer confused, not stimulated (as good cliffhangers do).

Comment on exemplary elements in the submission.
The film uses voiceover and close-ups effectively to create a great sense intimacy with the protagonist. Beautiful, bright cinematography that's visually engaging. Good use of visual effects and music (in the first half) to separate his imagination from reality for viewers.

Comment on problem elements in the submission.
The melancholy, reflective narration of the central character seemed labored/forced at times. Inadequate development of resolution clarifying reality from imagination didn't leave a positive impression. Also, a lot of time dedicated to set-up and credits, for a relatively short film.


Why is this submission not appropriate for DC Shorts’ audience? What other audience(s) might the film appeal to?
I think this film will leave our audiences baffled or irritated.

To be fair, I usually gut other movies this way, on my IMDB reviews. And it's actually a great review. It is vague. And I like that. Just didn't fit this festival. It's not easy being cheesy. Cool stuff and MOVING ON! Must do better.