"The Port" & Editing Film

I shot some really expired film over the weekend and cut it together with music.
There's a moment, I think, with most/all filmmakers that just need to step back and let the project breathe. This is something that was first conceived to have voiceover. A Bukowski type tough guy patois. This is NOT that movie. The footage guided what it was. A quiet passing of an item between one man to another. In fact, I wrote some corny voice over narration, check it out, before I had the footage:

EXT. GARDEN - DAY
A rotten apple hangs from a tree.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.)
I once knew a man who would whistle all the time.
MAN 1 (JAMES) sits on the patio reading a book.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.) (CONT’D)
At first I thought he did it to fill dead air.
EXT. BEACH - DAY
MAN 1 (JAMES) walks on an empty beach.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.)
Turns out it was to stop himself from saying the things he really wanted to say to people...
EXT. BEACH (UNDER PIER) - DAY
MAN 1 (JAMES) walks as waves crash behind him.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.)
...to tell them what he really thought of them.
EXT. FOOTBRIDGE - DAY
Palm trees. We settle on a MAN 2 (VINCE) walking across a footbridge with a book in hand. He opens the cover, starts reading.
EXT. PIER - DAY
Man 3 (JIMMY) sits on a bench at the edge of the pier.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.)
...imagine going through life with a tune stuck in your head. All the while knowing what it really means...
Man 2 (VINCE) sits next to Man 3 (JIMMY), hands off book.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.) (CONT’D)
...unable to communicate with people while hiding disappointment...
Man 3 (JIMMY) gets up and walks off, leaving Man 2 (VINCE) on the bench.
EXT. BEACH - DAY
The waves break violently. Two plastic lawn chairs are out. Man 1 (JAMES) sits in one.
Man 2 (JIMMY) saunters up, sits in the empty one. He hands the book over to Man 1 (JAMES). Man 1 gets up, exits.
EXT. PATIO - DAY
MAN 1 (JAMES) sits on the patio reading the book. We creep in. Inching closer. And closer still. Man 2 (VINCE) steps from sliding door.
EXT. BEACH - DAY
The book sits on mossy rocks, pages turn in the wind.
NARRATOR (MALE, V.O.)
...perhaps one day he will find a way to express his thoughts.
CUT TO BLACK

Yeah, on the nose and stupid. Sometimes, you have to let the movie tell you what it wants to be. Sometimes it requires so little.